Ready for college

Letter to the reader,

                This semester I took a course called college composition. At first I was nervous because I think of myself as a horrible writer.  This course has taught different ways to write and be more creative. The two things I struggle the most in writing is starting an essay and ending it. Ms. Basko gave our class a lot of material to work with. We got packets of different techniques to use when starting an essay and ending one. For example you can start an essay by a personal experience or a question. I have also learned how to peer edit papers. This is done by telling the writer if he or she has a strong introduction or a strong thesis statement. Also what details stood out to me the most or where parts of the essay lack details that need to be there. Lastly I have learned how to be more creative with titles of essays. I never add titles to my papers, I tend to leave them out because I never confident with them. Ms. Basko allowed us to play around with titles and it was good practice. As a writer I have defiantly improved. I completely hated writing before coming into this course. I pushed myself to take a writing course though because I know I will be writing a lot in college. I thought to myself I should struggle with it now and improve this year so I will be ready next year. I really think this class has prepared me for college and I have become more creative with my writing. In this class I was able to go outside of my box and expand on my ideas. My character sketch was my best piece and it showed how much I have improved as a writer.

           The first blog was about the food paper I did and my reflection on it. In class we had a day where we tasted food and we had be very descriptive on how the food tasted and what ingredients where in it. Our group did potato chips. In order for me to stay organized I used a chart to keep all my thoughts in order. We sampled Original potato chips, Baked, Light, and Sea salt. I kept a chart of each style of potato chip and my rating of them and why. Also I explained how my partner that read my potato chip paper loved my essay and thought it was well organized. My partner did chocolate and it was cool to get her reflection on my paper rather than someone else to did potato chips like me.  She also liked how I started with a slogan in my introduction and she thought it really grabbed the reader’s attention. My second post is just my food paper attached. My third post is the three new introductions we had to do as an assignment for our food paper.  First technique I used will be "An appeal to a common or imagined experience". I would used this technique because I feel putting something in your writing that can appeal to most people really keeps the reader interested. Second technique I used would be a "Question" to start my introduction. Using a question is risky but changes things up. Asking a question will really make the reader want to know the answer. Lastly I will use "An arresting statistic or shocking statement" to make the reader want to read more.  A shocking statistic is always good in your writing; it really shows that you did the research on your topic. It also will teach the reader something new and it will keep your writing interesting.

My forth post was just my reflection on the seven deadly sins paper I first draft. It talks about how I felt first writing it and what was easy and what was not.  I also talked about how I completely forgot to add an introduction in my draft so I talked about how I am going to start my essay.  Through this draft I really learned my strengths and weaknesses of a writer. I am really good at using dialogue to explain something but I need to work on introductions and proof reading my work!  After my reflection I posted my first draft of the seven deadly sins paper. My fifth post is my revised version of the Seven Deadly sins paper.  I even added a title on my paper which was risky for me, the title is, “The Seven Deadly sins committed at Wegmans.” I work at Wegmans and I could come up with multiple examples of the seven deadly sins that I see every day at Wegmans. My sixth post was two new conclusions of my Seven Deadly Sins paper. We had to do this as an assignment and it really gave me practice on some of the techniques to use when writing a conclusion.

My seventh post was my reflection on the How to paper we had to do as an assignment but it was with a partner. This was cool working with partner, it was something new. My partner and I did a How to Paper on how to get away from someone trying to flirt with you. I really liked our paper. Our paper had a lot of humor in it and it was very detailed. Our members of our class had to peer-edit our paper and they gave us really good ideas. I really liked the idea of adding pictures by each step showing people how to do it. My partner agreed that was a good idea. Also my partner and I forgot to conclude the paper so if we were to edit it we would add a conclusion.

My ninth post was my first draft my character sketch and questions for Ms. Basko to answer for me about my paper. My questions were; do you think my paper needs a title? Does the introduction draw you in as a reader? Is my paper clear and easily understood? Was my thesis clear in the second paragraph? Ms. Basko gave me feedback that I asked for and I used her feedback to write a revised draft. I learn to not use too much description because it can lose the reader. Also I have learned when starting an essay with a conversation can really hook the reader. My last post is my final revised version of my Character Sketch. Hope you enjoy my blog; I have put a lot of work and time into it J

Jenna

Nursing School

“Jenna I have some bad news.”
"Yes", I replied.
“Well Nono has cancer and we don’t know how long it will be.”
"WHAT!"
 My tears were running down my face even before my mother could finish her sentence. When my grandpa was 68 years old he was diagnosed with throat cancer. I had never been so shocked or upset. I looked over at the table when my mother told me and I saw my grandpa look on his face, it was devastating. He sat there holding a rosary and hugging me. I will always remember the rosary he brought everywhere he went, for example the doctor’s office. The rosary was blue, lots of beads, and extra long.  He would hold the rosary in both of his hands, shacking, crying, and confused.

My mother couldn’t even try to begin to explain what cancer was to my grandpa. At the time I was studying biology and I had a good understanding of cancer and how it works. Through my grandpa’s broken English it was a challenge to explain what cancer is. My mother left it up to me to work with him and do my best to give my grandpa an idea. My mom had enough on her plate to deal with, this was the least I could do. My grandpa needed me and I was willing to help.

My grandpa would ask me, “Jenna what is this thing called cancer?” As I looked down and try to come up with words to say to make him understand, I saw his piebald skin and it worried me. He would smile at me with his white teeth, but they were fake because he had denchers. He had very high cheekbones and his eyes were sunken in, he also had very thick laugh lines due to his astonishing personality. It was so hard to tell him this horrible disease when he was such a good person. It made me sick to my stomach to see him look more and more anorexic everyday. On top of that, he was bald due to all his treatments.

 I would try to explain to him that it’s when abnormal cells divide uncontrollably and can invade nearby tissues. Cancer cells can also spread to other parts of the body through the blood. Then he would ask me “Jenna what is a cell?” It was so hard for me to explain to him what this is about. He only had an education up to 8^th grade and never took a science course. I tired to explain it as basic as I could. But his limited vocabulary made it very hard to comprehended

            My grandpa is very distinctive due to his culture. He was born in Italy and married my grandma, Nilde. They had two kids, my mother and my uncle. He moved to America to find a better job and brought his family with him. Victor kept the Italian culture in the family. The household spoke Italian, ate Italian food and kept traditions. As my brothers and I grew up our grandpa was a huge part of my lives, and we would spend every weekend with them. At one point they lived with us for a couple of years. I never met someone who was so caring for his family always put others first.

The next question he asked me “Jenna what is a cell?” I told him, “The basic structural and functional unit in people and all living things. Cells keep you alive and cancer is killing the cells”. For months I would keep trying to explain to him what cancer is. He could not figure out what it was that was killing him. He couldn’t wrap his mind around something he just couldn’t see. He had a very aggressive from of cancer. By the age of 73, my grandpa passed away from cancer.

By educating my grandpa and watching him go through what he did made me realize how important it is to stay healthy and to learn what different diagnoses really are and how severe they can be. He had a huge impact on my life and it will carry on with me. There is not a day that goes by where I do not think about my grandparents and recognize what they have taught me. My goal is to work in the medical field, helping as many people as I can and educate people as well. I could not see myself doing anything else. I have a lot of love for people and really care about putting others first. I watched both of my grandparents go through medical struggles, which has influenced me to achieve my goals.

Character Sketch

        I picked my character sketch that I want to get feed back on. This character sketch was very personal paper for me. My grandpa was a huge role model to me and he has influenced me throughout my life. Writing this character sketch about him really was special to me. I had the opportunity to write about how great of a person he was and talked about what kind of person he was. I really like how I used my grandpas apperance to start my essay. I thought It was creative and something new I learned to do with my writing. My paper talked about how bad he struggled  when he was diagnosed with cancer. It was really easy to put my voice into the paper and I could really give it my all. There are a couple of things I would like feedback on though.
       Do you think my paper needs a title?
       Does the introduction draw you in as a reader?
       Is my paper clear and easily understood?
       Was my thesis clear in the second paragraph?
     

          The way he looked at me with those ebony downy eyes. I could see his tears starting to form. His eyes were shaped in a banjo way, yet somewhat bullish. Every time I would touch his hands to calm him down they would feel like sandpaper. As I looked down I saw his piebald skin and it worried me. His skin was like leather because of his over tanned olive skin tone. He would smile at me with his white teeth, but they were fake because he had denchers. He had very high cheekbones and his eyes were sunken in, he also had very thick laugh lines due to his astonishing personality. He looked more and more anorexic everyday. He was bald due to all his treatments.

            For over five years he had a constant look of worry and confusion on his face. My mother and I wished we could have snapped our fingers and made everything better. I would have done anything to make him better. I have never met someone who cared and loved his family so much. He was someone I truly looked up to and I was fascinated by him.

            My grandpa is very distinctive due to his culture. He was born in Italy and married my grandma, Nilde. They had two kids, my mother and my uncle. He moved to America to find a better job and brought his family with him. Victor kept the Italian culture in the family. The household spoke Italian, ate Italian food and kept traditions. As my brothers and I grew up our grandpa was a huge part of my lives, and we would spend every weekend with them. At one point they lived with us for a couple of years.

            When my grandpa was 67 years old he was diagnosed with throat cancer. I had never been so shocked or upset. When my mother told me this news I saw my grandpas face, it took my breath away. My grandpa was so confused that he would ask me “Jenna what is this thing called cancer?” I would try to explain to him that it’s when abnormal cells divide uncontrollably and can invade nearby tissues. Cancer cells can also spread to other parts of the body through the blood. Then he would ask me “Jenna what is a cell?” It was so hard for me to explain to him what this is about. He only had an education up to 8^th grade and never took a science course. I tired to explain it as basic as I could.

 I told him, “The basic structural and functional unit in people and all living things. Cells keep you alive and cancer is killing the cells”. It was so hard for him to comprehend what I was saying, but for months I would keep trying to explain to him what cancer is. He could not figure out what it was that was killing him. He had a very aggressive from of cancer. By the age of 73, my grandpa passed away from cancer.

By educating my grandpa and watching him go through what he did made me realize how important it is to stay healthy and to learn what different diagnoses really are and how server they can be. He had a huge impact on my life and it will carry on with me. There is not a day that goes by where I do not think about my grandparents and recognize what they have taught me. My goal is to work in the medical field, helping as many people as I can and educate people as well. I could not see myself doing anything else. I have a lot of love for people and really care about putting others first. I watched both of my grandparents go through medical struggles, which has influenced me to achieve my goals.

How to paper, reflection

    My initial thoughts on this assignment was that I thought we did a good job on the paper and used good techniques. We left out a conclusion but other than that we did the assignment well. My partner and I wanted to come up with something we could write a lot about, we kept on bouncing back in forth between different topics. The first one was how to get out of an awkward situation. We both thought that was too general so we went with how to get out of someone trying to flirt with you. We both thought it was a good idea to do flirting because I am a girl and my partner is a boy so we could get both perspective on the topic of flirting. The main obstacle was getting to a topic we basically spent a whole day trying to narrow down a topic. After that it was no problem getting started. Also making sure we included all the subtitles we wanted and organizing the paper. The easiest part of the assignment was getting started. Right away we both agreed on using definition to start are paper. We used the definition of flirting and then ending it with questions like, " have you ever had one of those times where someone you're not interested in starts flirting with you?" Also " did you know what to do?" This allows the reader to think about these questions while reading our suggestions in the next paragraphs. My partner and I both agree on that we need to make a title and a conclusion. We completely forgot to put the conclusion in. The conclusion should restate the thesis and say if you were to follow our suggestions then it will help you. Also we need to example some of the big words in our introduction like entendres. Entendres means a word, phrase, etc., that can be interpreted in two ways. Lastly adding visuals at the end of each subtitle to enhance the different actions that were exampled in each body paragraph. By making these revisions should really improve our paper. But I really liked how we layed out our paper and exampling it like was a set of instructions.

Intro: Flirting is a common form of social interaction whereby one person

obliquely Indicates a romantic or sexual interest towards another. It can consist of

conversation, body language, or brief physical contact. It may be one-sided or

reciprocated (encouraged) with intentions of getting to know that person on a higher

level. Flirting may involve speaking and behaving in a way that suggests greater intimacy

,than is generally considered appropriate to the relationship or the period that they have

known each other, without actually saying or doing anything that breaches any serious social norms, This may be accomplished by communicating a sense of playfulness or irony. Double entendres, with one meaning more formally appropriate and another more,

suggestive, may be used. Have you ever had one of those times where someone you’re

not interested in starts flirting with you? Did you not know what to do? Was it awkward?

Believe it or not there are solutions for you.

            • Simply move away,

 In order to properly complete this task wait till he or she is not paying attention during the conversation. Then at the perfect moment, make a. break for it! Making a break for it usually consists of disappearing into the crowd, straight up running for it, or slipping into a class room un-noticed.

• Tell them you have somewhere else to be.

            This is a classic excuse used by almost anyone in dire need of a quick and

safe escape. All you have to do is simply make up an excuse. For example,

tell them you have an appointment to get tested for pregnancy. Tell them

you have a class you need to get to.

• Start being obnoxious.

Being obnoxious is one of the oldest tricks in the book and there are many things you can do to annoy the person flirting with you. The objective here is to annoy, or disgust the person! Flirting with you so much that they leave you alone. There are many ways to be obnoxious some ways that works are as follows. Start singing a song, repeat everything someone says as a question, and sneeze, or blow your nose directly into your hand, prior to shaking someone 's hand.

• Walk with a friend

The buddy system is always good to have in getting out of sticky situations. You can always use them as an excuse to leave. They could help you out if you're stuttering and you don't have anything to say.

            • Say you have to go to the bathroom.

Saying you have to go to the bathroom is probably the best excuse to get away. They can't say you're lying because when you have to go, you have to go. Also you can lake as much time as you want to keep them waiting and while you're in there you can think of plans to escape.

• Start doing sign language indicating you are deaf.

             Doing this will either confuse them or give them the realization that you are indeed actually deaf. Then as a result they should just walk away because most people do not know sign language.

            • Be honest and tell them you're not interested.

 Saying this is straight up and mean, but it gets to the point. No matter how much they try to convince you, you can just keep saying "I'm not interested".

New conclusion of the Seven Deadly Sins

The first technique I will use to create the new conclusion will be, A warning based on the essay's thesis. This will help conclude the essay because I can explain why these seven deadly sins are important to be aware of.

When walking into Wegmans you should be aware of the seven deadly sins. By being aware of them you can be conscious not become just another rude customer trying to get their groceries. You can also expect that other people will be performing them so you can keep a safe distance. If people don’t become aware of the seven deadly sins then shopping at Wegmans will not be as enjoyable of an experience because everyone will be only focused on themselves.

The second technique I will use to create a second conclusion will be ending a discussion of a problem with a recommendation of course of action. This will help the end of my paper by showing how important it is to stop this problem at Wegmans.

            We need to make people aware of the Seven Deadly Sins so they better understand how it can hurt the employee feelings. Just because Wegmans is about great customer service doesn’t mean that the customer has the right to show no respects to the cashiers. By making people aware of the Seven Deadly Sins both the customers and employees will have greater respect for each other and make Wegmans a better place to shop at.

Revised Seven deadly sins paper

The Seven Deadly Sins committed at Wegmans

I have been a cashier at Wegmans for over a year and my job is very enjoyable. They have taught me to perform great customer service and social skills. The Total number of Rochester-based employees is approximately14, 500 people. All these employees including me have earned great experience working in the work field at Wegmans. Wegmans sells all basic needs and I enjoy working four times a week. I have encountered all kinds of people. Wegmans have provided me examples of people performing the seven deadly sins: avarice, sloth, envy, lust, gluttony, pride, and wrath.

Last night I was working on register twenty and this lady came through my line literally shoving her face with peanuts, I could not help but laugh. I always say when someone comes through my line, "Hey how are you today?" and she could barely answer me with food spraying out of her mouth, mumbling "I am good!” She was inhaling the peanuts so that’s all she could say. She would take a handful and shove them in her month and while she was chewing half of them would fall on the ground. It took her ten minutes to unload the cart; finally I went over and did it myself. From that point on she did not stop eating throughout the whole order.

Older people tend to be more greedy and needy. This old man I will never forget it, he came through my line basically forgetting everything that he came for. He made me call a manager to get all the items he forgot. This process held up people waiting behind for about 15 minutes. While I was scanning the other stuff he would lean over watching every move I made and complain about how expensive each item is. He would tell me about other stores and the prices are better. I felt like saying "well then go and get out of here, I am sick of you." I did not though obviously because I would lose my job. I never met such a greedy old man.

When I get assigned a register there is always someone working next to me. This girl next to me one time had so much pride in her work. She always made sure that she asked all the right questions, for example she would ask, “do you want your meat in plastic?" or questions like, "do you want you milk in a bag?" She thinks she is the best cashier and makes sure every manager sees her fantastic work she performs everyday. I have never seen her mess up or get yelled at by a customer. She works every day after school and I can tell she really loves coming into work.

Last summer I knew these two employees that definitely had a relationship. They would always flirt and take their breaks together; you could tell something was going on between them. I could not help but ask if they were together or not. They laughed at me said, "haha no way" and kept laughing. They were too flirty to not have something. I don’t think they want anyone to know if they are together or not. The girl is always hugging him and putting her arm around him. They for sure had a lot of chemistry.

This one lady came through my line, and she was perfect. She was about 5’6 perfect height and had long brown hair and blue eyes. Brown hair and blue eyes are a combination that I have always wanted. She had a perfect husband who was unloading the cart and you could tell he was in love with her. I envied everything about her. I loved her clothes, jewelry, and nails. When I am older I hope to have her appearance and looked as good as she did at her age.

I have experienced many people that come through my line that are so lazy. I love when the strong men help my lift a hug thirty packs of beer, or even a huge heavy reusable bag. I hate when the men just sand and watch me struggle it is so unnecessary. This is the most annoying thing that happens at work; customers will take their blue baskets full of food and leave on the belt. This means I have to leave my register to unload and then ring it out. How hard is it to unload the basket and make the process go quicker? Customers will pick a magazine and watch me struggle. Everything is always ten times harder for me because I am five feet tall.

            I hate when I make customers mad, it really makes my shift go by slower. There are multiple things that can really make a customer angry. For example not giving them the exact change, and adding the wrong amount when they want cash back from using a debit card. Another error that could occur is forgetting to scan their coupons and or bottle slips. This can happen because I either forgot or they leave them somewhere I can not see. This means they would have to go to customer service and customer service workers will have to do it. Right when I hit the EFT button and the transaction goes through there is nothing I can do from there and customer service has to deal with it. Customers hate going to customer service, and I don’t see why. There is never that huge of line. Going to customer service is considered a hassle though. I have had many things said to me that were not too nice, for example “are you kidding me!” or “Are you an idiot?” Those comments just really make me angry. I am not perfect and mistakes happen.

            Working at Wegmans has really given me experience to learn about the real world. The seven deadly sins can be performed at Wegmans on a daily basis. This is important because after college I am going to be working for the rest of my life. Learning good customer service and social skills now will benefit me in the long run. I am grateful to know what is coming for the future and learning how to deal with all kinds of people. I will continue this job throughout senior year, and if I stay close to home for college I will sustain this job as well.

Seven Deadly Sins Reflection

   I couple months ago we read "All Seven Deadly Sins Committed at Church Bake Sale". The first thing I thought when I was reading this is that the sins were a little old fashion and I did not know what some of the words meant like wrath and avarice. After looking up those words and understanding all the sins, right away I though my job does a great job exampling each one of these sins. I work at Wegmans and I deal with all kinds of people and I have a great example for each sin. I struggled with starting the paper and concluding the paper. That has always been an issue for me when I comes to writing. Getting my examples and details in the body paragraph is what I can do best. Exampling myself is truly what comes easy to me. Ideas also come to me easy, right away I thought about my job and I stuck with that and it worked for me.
        The expository mode is a general category under which we can lump more specific modes like comparison and contrast, process and analysis, classification, definition, classification, exemplification, and others. This piece was all about learning exemplification writing. I learned how to take an idea and example it through examples, and I used examples from my own Job. I feel when I can use examples from my own personal experience I really can use a lot of details. It also makes writing this essay a lot easier and I can make it more interesting.
        When I re-read my essay yesterday, I thought the draft was well written and I exampled the sins well with my examples. But I really missed the whole introduction! I need a paragraph before I jump into my examples. I started with the background about Wegmans and how long I have worked there, I need to take that part, add more, and make an introduction out of it. After that then example each example with each sin, paragraph by paragraph. Also my thesis was unclear because my introduction was not clear. When I revise my paper I need to make a stronger thesis and put it at the end of my introduction. The conclusion is solid but It needs more. Maybe talk about something positive about Wegmans and end it on a positive note? Also the part where I say "Working at Wegmans has really given me experience to learn about the real world." I should expand on that and why its important. I struggled with the title, introduction, and conclusion. I didn't even have an introduction and title. As I edit it my paper, that's what I need to work. Also working on word choice will help my essay a lot. The examples came very easy to me because there are so many examples at Wegmans. I really got detailed with each examples and I got to use dialogue to help the paper. All my examples were based off of anecdotes and observation and I really got to be personally with my paper and that helped me to write this paper. If these changes were to take place I think it will make the paper flow better and help make the examples more clear. Also having a clear introduction will help the generalization of the paper.

I have been a cashier at Wegmans for a year and my job is grand. I have learned great customer service and social skills. The Total Number of Rochester-based
Employees are 14,500 people (approximate). Wegmans basically sells everything and I enjoy working four times a week. I have encountered all kinds of people.
Last night I was working on register 20 and this lady came through my line literally shoving her face with peanuts, I could not help but laugh. As I always say when someone comes through my line, "Hey how are you today?" and she could barely answer me with food spraying out of her mouth, mumbling "I am good!" That was it, was all she could say. She was taking hand full at a time and it took her ten minutes to unload the car, finally I went over and did it myself. From that point on she did not stop eating throughout the whole order.

Older people tend to be more greedy and needy. This old man I will never for it, he came through my line basically forgetting everything they he came for. He made my call me manager to get all the stuff he forgot. This process held up people waiting behind for about 15 minutes. While I was scanning the other stuff he would lean over watching every move I made and complain about how expensive each item is. He would tell me about other stores and the prices are better. I felt like saying "well then go and get out of here, I am sick of you." I did not though obviously because I would lose my job. I never met such a greedy old man.

When I get assigned a register there is always someone working next I. This girl next to me one time had so much pride in her work. She always made sure that she asked all the right questions, for example she would ask, “do you want your meat in plastic?" or questions like "do you want you milk in a bag?" She thinks she is the best cashier and makes sure every manager sees her fantastic work she performs everyday and she will never have a bad day.
Last summer I knew these two employees that definitely had a relationship. They would always flirt and take their breaks together; you could tell something was going on between them two. I could not help but ask if they were together or not? They laughed at me said "haha no way" and kept laughing. I know thought they have something they have too much chemistry to not.

This one lady came through my line, and oh my was she gorgeous. She was about 5’6 perfect height and had long brown hair and blue eyes. Brown hair and blue eyes are a combination I have always wanted. She had a perfect husband they was unloading the cart and you could tell he was in love with her. I envied everything about her. I loved her clothes, jewelry, and nails. She had everything going. When I am older I hope to have her appearance and looked as good as she did at her age.

I have experienced many people that come through my line that are so lazy. I love when the strong men help my lift a hug thirty rack of beer, or even a huge heavy reusable bag. I hate when the men just sand and watch me struggle it is so unnecessary. Another thing I had when customers are lazy, they will take their blue baskets full of food and leave on the belt. This means I have to leave my register to unload and then ring it out. How hard is it to unload the basket and make the process go quicker? Customers will pick and magazine and watch me struggle and everything is always ten times hard for me because I am five feet tall.

            I hate when I make customers mad it really makes my shift go by slower. There are multiple things that can really make a customer angry. For example not giving them the exact change, and adding the wrong amount when they want cash back from using a debit card. Another error that could occur is forgetting the scan there coupons because I didn’t not see them or bobble slips. This means they would have to go to customer service and they will have to do it. I have had many things said to me that were not too nice, for example “are you kidding me!” or Are you an idiot?” just really makes me angry. I am not perfect and mistakes happen. Right when I hit the EFT button and the transaction goes through there is nothing I can do from there and customer service has to deal with it. Customers hate going to customer service, and I don’t see why there is never that huge of line. Going to customer service is considered a hassle though.

            Working at Wegmans has really given me experience to learn about the real world. I am grateful to know what is coming for the future and learning how to deal with all kinds of people. I will continue this job throughout senior year, and if I stay close to home for college I will sustain this job as well.

Introductions

My original introduction was two paragraphs long. I used the definition of potato chips in my first paragraph. I also explained what chips are used for and the history of the potato chip. In my second paragraph I talked about why our class did this assignment and that we read "No wonder why they call me a bitch" and how that drove our class to do this. Then my thesis statement came after that.
        

Wikipedia states, “potato chips are thin slices of potato that are deep fried or baked until crispy.” Potato chips are commonly served as an appetizer, side dish, or snack. The basic chips are cooked and salted; additional varieties are manufactured using various flavorings and ingredients including seasonings, herbs, spices, cheeses, and artificial additives. Crisps, however, refer to many different types of snack products in the UK and Ireland; some made from potato, but may also be made from corn, maize and tapioca. An example of these kinds of crisps is Monster Munch.

In our college composition class we read a piece called, “No Wonder They Call Me a Bitch.” Ann Hodgman wrote this piece and in it she analyzed dog food. She figures out what is really in dog food and what it tastes like. She states that one Purina spoke man told her that “poultry by-products consists of necks, intestines, undeveloped eggs and other “carcass remnants,” but not feathers, heads, or feet.” She explained what they look like and how they felt and taste. This drove our class to do our own test day on different foods. Our group did Potato chips using the brand Lays.

In my first introduction I used definition and explanation. For my three new introduction paragraphs, I will try new techniques. First technique I will use will be "An appeal to a common or imagined experience". I would used this technique because I feel putting something in your writing that can appeal to most people really keeps the reader interested. Second technique I will use would be a "Question" to start my introduction. Using a question is risky but changes things up. Asking a question will really make the reader want to know the answer. Lastly I will use "An arresting statistic or shocking statement" to make the reader want to read more.  A shocking statistic is always good in your writing, it really shows that you did the research on your topic. It also will teach the reader something new and it will keep your writing interesting.
Come on, once or twice in your life you sat down and ate a whole bag of potato chips. Doesn't matter what kind of potato chip it is, original, barbecue, or sour cream and onion, its hard to not just eat a couple. One of many Lay's slogans are " Betcha can't eat just one ". This slogan really says it all when it comes down to eating a serving size of potato chips. Our college composition class analyzed four different kinds of Lays potato chips, Baked, Original, Light, and the Deluxe. By comparing and contrasting each kind of potato chips and their ingredients really showed which potato chip is hard to eat just one.
        Do you really like potato chips? What is it about them that you like? America's favorite snack is potato chips. I personally don't understand how its every one's favorite snack. When my mom buys them they sit in our house for weeks, my brothers will eat them but I don't. If I were to eat any kind of potato chips it would be the baked kind. This is because they aren't so greasy and they are more crisper. I much rather eat a bag of carrots than a bag of chips. Our college composition class had to compare four different kinds of potatoes chips, Original, Baked, Light, and Deluxe. At least I got to enjoy the Baked kind and they are better for me too.
"Americans spend more than $6 billion a year on potato chips according to the Snack Food Association." That is so much money just spend on potato chips. Potato chips are such and addicting snack and potato chip company advertisement really draws people at the grocery store to pick up a bag of chips. A bag of chips depending on the brand usually cost 2.99 which doesn't not seem a lot but it does add up. Our college composition class analysed four different kind of Lays potato chips and their ingredients. The main ingredients are salt, fat, and carbohydrates which is man reason why Americans love them. There is nothing healthy about a potato chip. Our group analysed Original chips, Baked, Light, and the Deluxe kind which has sea salt on the chips.

Wikipedia states, “potato chips are thin slices of potato that are deep fried or baked until crispy.” Potato chips are commonly served as an appetizer, side dish, or snack. The basic chips are cooked and salted; additional varieties are manufactured using various flavorings and ingredients including seasonings, herbs, spices, cheeses, and artificial additives. Crisps, however, refer to many different types of snack products in the UK and Ireland; some made from potato, but may also be made from corn, maize and tapioca. An example of these kinds of crisps is Monster Munch.

In our college composition class we read a piece called, “No Wonder They Call Me a Bitch.” Ann Hodgman wrote this piece and in it she analyzed dog food. She figures out what is really in dog food and what it tastes like. She states that one Purina spoke man told her that “poultry by-products consists of necks, intestines, undeveloped eggs and other “carcass remnants,” but not feathers, heads, or feet.” She explained what they look like and how they felt and taste. This drove our class to do our own test day on different foods. Our group did Potato chips using the brand Lays.

Lays is the one of biggest potato chip companies in America. Lays have a bunch of slogans. For example, Happiness is Simple, Simply Made, and Simply Good (2009), That's another reason to smile! and Food for the fun of it! (2007), Lays, get your smile on! (2006-), Lays. Want some? And Betcha can't eat just one (1960s-2006). For me potato chips are not my favorite thing to eat, I could take it or leave it.

We tested Original chips, baked chips, Light chips, and sea salt chips. In my opinion a potato chip is a thin piece of fired potato that is filled of salt and grease. Each packaged had promises they advertised. For example, the sea salt deluxe bag promised thick cuts of potato and the Light Lay’s bag promised it still had great taste. On the bag it still showed a great looking potato chip that looks appealing to eat. The bag gives me all the facts that I want to hear, like its all natural or its reduced fat. The original potato chip and the sea salt potato chips felt greasy and I could feel the salt. Also you could almost see through them. The baked and Light Lay’s chips felt dry and you could not see through them at all. I thought the original and baked chips tasted the best because it had a lot of salt and original potato chips always taste amazing. Light Lay’s tasted like card board and barley had a taste and the sea salt was just too strong, I could not eat a lot of them. They basically all smelled like potatoes and salt, the Light Lay’s wasn’t as strong as the other kinds. As I asked people about what they  think about potato chips and most girls say oh its to fattening and too greasy. Guys love them!

Types of Lays Potato chips	Baked Chips	Original	Sea Salt Deluxe	Light
Rating (1-4)	4	3	2	1
Description	Crispy, Salty not greasy just the right taste	Crunchy, salty, greasy, full of flavor but cant eat to much of  them.	Very strong salty taste. Thick cuts of potato.	Barley any salt, tasteless/cardboard.

   

Each kind of potato chip had their own taste and personally I like the baked chips the best. They have the best taste than any of the other kinds. Not to greasy and they are pretty good for you as well. They have the crunch that stratifies me and they are salty but very good. It only has two grams of fat and 120 calories in 1 oz. Also has two grams of protein. I know my favorite kind after really comparing each

"Food Paper"

      When our group got assigned potato chips we had to do research before we could start the draft. As a group we had to taste the four different kind of Lay's potato chips and gather information. We tasted Original, Baked, Light, and Deluxe potato chips. We gathered information like color, taste, and texture. After I had my personal opinion on each one I did some research. I looked up all the different slogans also I looked up the history of the potato chips. After that then I looked up the statistics on each potato chips like the nutritional value and compared how that would influence the taste of each kind of chip. After I organized all the information I gathered I began to start my food paper. I had to think about how I was going to start my paper and what information I wanted to use. First I started with what it takes to make a chip and the history. After that I talked about what made our class do this assignment and the piece " No wonder why they call me bitch", drove our class to do so. After that I talked about all the different catchy slogans. The hardest part was where to go after that. Using descriptive words to analyze potato chips was the hardest and the organization of the paper. The easiest was researching the history and it was also very interesting. Also tasting the chips was obvious the easiest and fun part of the assignment.  I enjoyed being creative with this paper and being brave by putting charts and pictures into my paper. The techniques I used were compare and contrast, description, and definition. First in my intro I used definition of the potato chips then told about what I was going to compare and contrast. Then I have a whole paragraph about the descriptions of each potato chip and how each one compared with each other.
       After reading my essay over again I really enjoyed my partners opinions and my own.When I went back and re read my draft I first thought I could of made it a lot better. My partner disagree and thought it was great and well organized. I really enjoyed the chart I made of my descriptions of each potato chips and the visuals I used. I enjoyed my opinion on how Baked chips were my favorite. I should of switch the first to paragraphs I think my essay would flow better but overall I think it had good organization. I also enjoyed the history of the potato chip I put in the intro I think it really grabs the readers attention.
        My partner gave me some great feedback. She said that making my title a slogan would be a great idea. I agree because I think it would grab the readers attention more and make the reader think where that slogans is from, what advertisement? She also gave me a suggestion to switch the first and second paragraph because the second paragraph would make the intro stronger and the paper flow more. I agree with her and if I were to edit my paper I would consider it. She also told me that my paper was atomistic and it makes the read smile.  
     I plan to revise my ending paragraph and make it more descriptive. I would of liked to put another paragraph just on baked chips and how much I like them and give a really good description. I also would of liked to add maybe more opinion on what other viewers think of potato chips. Get direct quotes from online and show how really people think so. Also on the description paragraph talk more about an experience about potato chips like a anecdote. This will make the paper more personal.